you live with me

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you live with me

Postby eliana » Mon Nov 12, 2012 8:56 pm

i can't breathe
five pounds-


so much heavier in absence.
so small a loss-so great a pain.
i can't breathe.
drowning
unable to move
i dive in

the pain is sweeter than letting go.

you never saw my face
i never heard your voice
your laugh
your tears
you never held my hand
i never felt your kiss
your joy
your pain

screaming inside
i die with you
you live with me.
my precious little rose who never felt the thorns
you live with me
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Re: you live with me

Postby Ihearthee » Sat Jan 18, 2014 1:47 am

Beautiful.
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Re: you live with me

Postby eliana » Sat Jan 18, 2014 10:05 am

i'm glad i shared it, then.
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Re: you live with me

Postby Gorthaur the Cruel » Sat Jan 18, 2014 11:32 am

Yeah - thanks for bumping this.

It's kind of devastating. Graceful and elegant, but still devastating.
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Re: you live with me

Postby eliana » Sat Jan 18, 2014 12:44 pm

thank you. i lost my daughter at 34 weeks. with my family history of early delivery, we were looking at any day, hoping for a couple more weeks, but getting ready nonetheless. words have long been my solace, poetry is sort of like a bandage for me, i guess. it's comforting when someone else appreciates it.
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Re: you live with me

Postby Kaya » Fri Jan 24, 2014 8:03 am

Beautiful and heart wrenching - thank you for sharing. I'm sorry you had to go through this. :(
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